When?
you last time felt it?
felt what?
..
dried lips
jammed bolts
bones fragile
skin cold
face beaten
eyes froze
head emptied
..
why this blank?
discrete..
without soul
body in motion
silhouette stopped
what kept me all engrossed
..
I wish I could make a wish,
wish to undo
and turn the time
get back to the life,
a life full of
contempt, hate, complain
yet freedom, respect, gain
everyday’s challenge to touch sky
make new plans and dream high
live the moments,
indescribable
desire, inseparable
dream, undisguised
…
life was mess but
It was alive..
Life sure is a mess na 🙂 n it totally is alive 😀 n this is kinda indescribable 😀 \m/ ❤
🙂 yeah Sanx
Like the song says, ‘I’d rather feel pain, than nothing at all…’
Thanks for the read and bful comment 🙂
my pleasure!
“discrete..
without soul
body in motion
silhouette stopped
what kept me all engrossed”
This context is really good.
I completely agree with “life was mess but
It was alive..”
Something like what gates had stated in a interview ” Life is not fair, get used to it”
Good one chitra. Congrats.
Thanks for your valuable remarks Karthick 🙂
Gates is right, “Life is not fair, get used to it”.
🙂
🙂 Cool. Carry on. Once we could understand this, may be thats the day we get to know the maturity level in us 🙂
Merci pour ta gentille visite à mon blog et ton inscription, sois la bienvenue.
How do you link “being alive” to ‘a life full of contempt, hate, complain’ ? What is the connection between these aspects and ‘freedom, respect, gain everyday’s challenge to touch sky make new plans and dream high live the moments,…’? Could this be due to an underlying belief waiting to be reviewed?
Shakti
Hi Shakti, thanks for reading, reviewing and questioning.. 🙂
I am happy to answer that the words I used here have an understanding and very deep relation between contempt, hate and complain and freedom, respect and gain… your eyes might have seen the relation between dark and light, the existence of light removes the possibility of dark and the absence of light increases chances for the dark, likewise and in even more elaborated way, where you witness complains, contempt and hate there will be a desire emerging for freedom, a desire to break it down and this strong desire begets opportunities and success and gain… And many more…
I hope that my explanation will satisfy your query. I would be happy to answer more questions.
Thanks again for your time 🙂
Also being alive is just not being in good condition without feeling any pain, hatred and any revolt .. being alive means you have been a part of everything that has happened to you and good or bad you reacted and learnt the best ways out of it and ultimately got success… being alive means being strong during struggle and in the end enjoy the success.. That is what I meant …
Oh I like the staccato style here… totally set the pace of the poem!
Yup, whatever it be – dull, vengeful, piercing, hurtful, soothing, whatever – it certainly is LIFE indeed, which not many are quite as lucky to live, much less enjoy..
So, bring it on, I say! The horns are mine to take! 🙂
A good read.. with lots of emotion and “soul”
Hi Kavita, thank you so much for reading and liking it. 🙂
I really appreciate your review and remarks… 🙂
Thanks again.
❤ Soulful
Also I agree with your point that Life is indeed mixture of pain and comfort.. without pain there is no value of comfort and without dullness there is no realization of the times we enjoy.. this mixture keeps us alive and thats what is being missed by Soulful 🙂
Thanks for your understanding and love towards the words used … \m/ 🙂
Well said kavitha! Realistic words !
🙂
i due splendidi gigli sono le due facce dell’esistenza quella oscurata e quella in piena luce, così si svolge la vita, così ho letto le belle immagini in poesia che hai dato
piacere di averti conosciuta
@ventisqueras the two beautiful lilies are two sides of existence that obscured and that in full light and life takes place, so I read the beautiful images in poetry that you have given pleasure to meet you..
Thanks.. 🙂
you read right
😉
🙂
i really miss my life when it was a mess but alive
🙂
Thanks all for the like 🙂